Category: Writers Block
I didn't like the origional title so I changed it on the fly.
I was listening to Fuel and this got me thinking of a poem to write. It's short, and at somepoint I'd surely love to expand upon it, but as I'm sapped for creative energy...
This, no means will match Cala, Chelsea, Kai, or Bauer in writing abilities but I can at least say I tried to rhyme.
Now for the actual thing.
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The revenge of your subconscious
You sold your soul.
To always know.
You broke your pride.
To feel alive.
And yet, now you strive,
To consummate a lie.
How this all has fallen into your hands,
The master plan.
Write it up,
Tell your friends,
That it's yours again.
You've watched Brooklyn burn,
You've watched the world turn,
And have nothing left but your pride,
And yet, do you feel alive?
Ahem. I do not think I should be included in the abovementioned (is that a word? probably not) group, but thank you just the same, darlin'.
I like this. For one thing, it rhymes, and I am always very envious of those who can rhyme well, because I can't. For another thing, it reads like lyrics, which is also something I wish I could achieve. And, finally,you used the word consummate. Awesome! Lol...don't ask.
If ever you do expand on it, I hope you'll post the rest. Cheers.
I like the sound of it: the way it flows.
I sure hope you expand on it.
Bob